ShopDreamUp AI ArtDreamUp
Deviation Actions
Literature Text
My dreams are
Etched in silver.
Carved in
The shattered
Glass mirror
Of my memories.
Each night
I fall asleep,
Exploring my dreams,
Surrounded by
Forgotten memories.
Each time that I wake
The dreams escape,
Stolen by the
Thief of reveries.
He steals my dreams,
And in their place
He leaves a haze
I cannot explain.
My dreams are
Lost in oblivion,
Scattered into a
Million pieces.
Stolen by the
Thief of reveries,
I long for these
Forgotten memories.
Etched in silver.
Carved in
The shattered
Glass mirror
Of my memories.
Each night
I fall asleep,
Exploring my dreams,
Surrounded by
Forgotten memories.
Each time that I wake
The dreams escape,
Stolen by the
Thief of reveries.
He steals my dreams,
And in their place
He leaves a haze
I cannot explain.
My dreams are
Lost in oblivion,
Scattered into a
Million pieces.
Stolen by the
Thief of reveries,
I long for these
Forgotten memories.
Here are some questions I'd like answered for the TWR critiques:
-First thing that comes to mind when reading it?
-How can I make it better?
-Overall impact of the poem?
And thank you everyone 
I appreciate the feedback!
All rights reserved. All the materials contained on my deviantART account may NOT be used, reproduced, copied, edited, published, transmitted, borrowed, duplicated, printed, downloaded, or uploaded in any way without my express written permission.
Link to TWR critique: comments.deviantart.com/1/2674…
Comments23
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
i really loved your poem, the imagery that you create with your words are awesome, for me the stolen dreams are like a hope shatered by the action of the thief of reveries, to get it better i think that you should writte a way to get back your stolen dreams and get free from that oblivion haze; and finally i have a question for you ¿who is the thief of reveries?
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
beware of the sons of the light cause they have the darkness as father